my dragon

Name: Celestria
Nickname: Abbie
Age: 1 year old
Species: unknown
Appearance: http://www.google.com.pr/imgres?q=black+dragons+pictures&hl=es&sa=X&biw=1440&bih=799&tbm=isch&prmd=imvns&tbnid=uD3ErYn-4AoUZM:&imgrefurl=http://battleforthearth.webs.com/apps/photos/photo%3Fphotoid%3D82729368&docid=8K5BejldwaxIJM&imgurl=http://battleforthearth.webs.com/photos/Evil-Clans/blackdragon.jpg&w=680&h=721&ei=TjssT4LsKdCItwf1x6zkDw&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=623&vpy=305&dur=1033&hovh=231&hovw=218&tx=102&ty=157&sig=114760581441766742214&page=1&tbnh=147&tbnw=136&start=0&ndsp=30&ved=1t:429,r:10,s:0
Personality: hes a very friendly,serious,loves to eat,agressive whith strangers,loyal to his master.
Background: i was walking to a mountain i never gone too before, when i got to the sumit i found a cave in the mountain, i went inside the cave and i found a dragon i got scare, but i sence something wrong whith the dragon soo i went close to him and i saw the dragon with deap cuts,then someone was talking with me i dint know who it was and i said, who is here and show your self ,he responded i am the dragon who is in front of you i am using telephaty to comunicate with you,then i said if she needs help, she said no,its too late for me now i want you to do me a favor,i said ok what do you need,she said i want you to take care of my egg thats is next to me and when it hatches to raise him like if hes your baby,i said that i well promised to take care of him like hes my baby.then 30 minutes pass and the dragon died,but before the dragon die she told me that her name was Celestria,she allso told me how she got hurt really bad she said,that she was looking for food in the forest whend a group of soldier atack her then she got hurt really bad and escape the soldiers and she left to her cave ,then i appear .after she died i went home whith the egg 2 week passed and the egg hatcheds i knew i had to name it but i did not now its gender soo i told some one how to know if the dragon is a male or female soo i ask people in the village and i meet a dragon master who know about dragons i told him that i have a dragon at my house and dont know it gender he told me if he can go and see the dragon i said yes and we went to my home,whend we got to my room the dragon master check his gender he told me that its a female dragon he allso realize he was a very rare dragon whith mysterious powers like telephaty, warp to the location of there master, throw black fire balls, travel at hi speed velocity,summon wierd shadow,and that even there most powerful breath can melt moutains,ithe the dragon master told me to take care of the dragon,he allso told me what im gonna name the dragon soo i name her celestria.10 minute pass and the dragon master left and before he left he told me how to feed him and raise her.

Hey Ninx your dragon sounds really cool, but before we could evaluate it you need to change a few things.

A one year old dragon would have just hatched, so your character could not fly it yet. (Just letting you know)

You also need to add more detail to your dragons personality, and history. Try to make each of your dragon's traits
a sentence and why your dragon has that trait. With the History, try to explain the egg before your dragon hatched,
why did the dragon's mom die, and where did you go after the egg hatched.

It's a great start, just add more detail.

Thanks

~Maki

Approved.